I think that this is a great poem...You hould give it to him...or whoever it is you're giving it to...I think they'ed REALLY like it.

Hmm.. An intresting read. Ok i liked the first two stanza's, but form these two stanza's and partly stanza three, i felt you were going to use the repition of "Do you know" throughtout each stanza of the poem. But you didnt. This kinda threw me off. That being said, i liked the flow of it. Your rhyme scheme could of had some work though. I liked the emotion this poem shows so well. And the wordsa were quite heartfelt. Especially the end of this poem the emotion was really touching and it was quite sad. The strucutre was ok. I suggest you use more punctuation in your work though. Sorry if my comment seems harsh. Keep writing.. xx