Hey! great poem mate! I really liked the story and how you'd y'kno given it a meaning! well done

Good job! I liked the story and how it kind of kept the reader guessing for a while! :D Good, good job, Jakey!
Kris

Good, i got cconfused in the middle and had to re-read. but i do like it. the ending could use some re-wording to fit withthe rest of the poems flow. But I love it other wise. I am just really picky about ryhme and flow. your point is great. i loved the peom

~Blackrose1011

"life is short and fate is fickle
so enjoy life and never give up hope
for death's always waiting with his sickle "
i liked this part because its very true.

I really like this piece. How it all flows through and all makes sense. It was written very well. I think the last verse could be re-written. To give it a final ending. But not that I could think of a better way to end it anyway. A great write doll.

Kat

The message is powerful about how we should enjoy everything around us. I don't like to think of death as waiting lol that's just me. But I liked having the character be an older man. I think seeing the word for the first time in years. By that I mean as the world really could be if society could pay more attention instead of just getting through the day. Maybe that's just the imagery I got :)

That was just wow, it was awesome
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