Very nice. i love the thought behind it. and it is a unique write. the only thing i would say is to capture more of the feeling you are trying to convey. the judgement part at the end seems to come out of nowhere. but i like that it is there. maybe add a little more to that effect. ...oh yeah. you use the word rain a lot, which i think sort of takes away from the poem. maybe use another word for it. but its not really nessacary sometimes repetition is good. keep it up