Good Poem Mechelle

I like this poem but the running on lines distract the attention from it. Maybe fix those lines so they don't run off onto another sentence. It might improve the flow. It's really a nice poem though

A bit choppy in your flow, but you make up for that with the great message your poem sends, to rise up and be the one, to make the world better. Nice job.

-Tainted Mikochan

Brilliant message in the poem, the flow is a little interupted but the message is very good and meaningful, try shortening the lines a little bit... good poem!

This had a good meaning behind it. There was few mistakes in there that made it difficult to read it. I had to go back a few times. But you can just edit that. Other then that, I really liked it. It was nice! 5/5

luv natalie x-x

Thanks

This poem has countless mistakes, so many that I won't even both listing them here. If you need me to list them for you, just get in touch. Good effort, but it could do with some editing.

Good Effort hear and i think that this would make a good first draft. I like the message and felt the power although i want you read it at loud to yourself and maybe you'll realise that the flow is a bit jarrd if you get me . Well Done any

Sondos

It had a great meaning, and the message was clearly great. Though, I must say, the poem went a little slowly and I did have to read a few lines over again. The flow wasn't as nice as it could be. But I thought you did a great job in expressing and making your point... and that is a great poet. Keep it up!

Oh wow

the message of this poem is really strong
i really liked reading it
and my eyes weidened
as i read each line

its amazing 5/5

This was a good. Had a good meaning to it aswell. I think in the 6th line though, You might have meant 'Difference' Instead of different. Im not sure. But great poem. Really like it! 5/5

`taleee xx

It's a nice poem but your lines kinda run into each other. Fix the structure and it'll be excellent

Beautiful poem, I loved how you made it almost a story. Written eloquently with strength. 5/5