Pretty good, could deffinitly tell where you're coming from in this one. A Lil more clearer than the last one. Keep it up.

Try to keep your stanzas with the same beat. instead of having different lengths each time.

U honestly deserve a girl evry much as bit as the one u describe, youre a sweet guy and keep looking, ull find her, one day, wait for one who treats you right, k, ur poem really put a guys feelings of finding the right girl into perspective......keep writing