by Vanessa Lea Apr 3, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
I held a man today |
by Brooke Amity
This poem makes me think that we have to spend as much time together as we can!!!! |
This poem was written pretty well with keeping the syllable counts basically constant and the rhymes were okay. I wasn't into the reptition of shame and a few other points but you managed to keep them fromsticking out and blend into the poem. |
Wow...amazing again. You really know how to get your thoughts across. Amazing job.. |
by firexflys
That was really good. and very true keep up the great job ur work is really good. 5.5 |
by Sean Allen
Something about the use of shamed seemed incorrect to me... I would change it to was ashamed, but that is a couple more syllables. |