Wow i love it keep it up

love ya
heather

Your poems are deep and thought provoking i love them

*~vixen~*

Such a deep piece, great job def got my 5 vote keep writing and take care hun sarah x

Great piece, i loved the imagery and metaphor. congrats, 5/5.

This is really really good!! i love the words you used, and the rhyming was perfect! was this actually about smoking? because you could've used this for anything, like abuse, or a really bad breakup. OR maybe i just think too much about things, and it was about smoking... theres only one correction (don't worry, it's just spelling, in the 4th stanza), instead of "to", the line should say "too" many puffs...
anyways... great job with this!!
5.5!

Forever*Yours

I really liked this one. When it comes to cigarettes I can definitely relate to this in that way. 5/5

marcella

This was beautifuly written, I haveno advise to make it any better. 5+/5

Great poem.. its soo intense.. i can really feel the emotion your expressing.. very hearfelt and descriptive.. perfect flow and rhyme.. AGAIN!! lol .. 2nd favorite! hehe :)P

This was a very good poem addictions are so hard to break and its sad when someone gets so addicted that it takes over their life great poem 5/5

I loved the words, you described what you wanted us to see so perfectly. well done

much love and many kisses,
bex

OMG this is an incredible and beautiful poem. The flow was flawless and the words were just utterly captivating. You create an image in the reader's mind in such a short time yet it is so vivid. You did an incredibly great job on this poem. Great great job.

5/5
~Stephen White

Beets = beats

And like the cigarette I'm speechless, = And like the cigarette, I'm speechless;

and from the many lies, choke.= kind of sketchy. It would be best for this or the verse to be removed.

while telling myself this is enough. =while telling myself that this is enough.

we both ignite. = we ignite

I enjoyed this poem a real lot, although you could've made the last verse/line a little stronger. All in all, this topic is largely unoriginal, yet somehow you made it seem original.

Great job,

Stephen White

I liked your title, when I read it, I was thinking I would be reading a sad love poem. But absolutely not. I like that it was a different topic and again, the flow was great.

:) I love this poem! you're really talented! keep up the good work! :)

WOW, all i can say is.........WOW, i mean is a certain kind of symbalisim,(s/p), and using inanimate objects to be people is great

This is really good. i once had a relationship like this but soon we broke up. did you have a relationship like this? great work 5/5