Your Life...

by Nikki   Apr 3, 2006


Your life has to be painfully lived

Your heart has to painfully beat

Your mind has to be painfully processed

Your words mean nothing

Your mind hurts your being

Your thoughts hurt your existence

Your memories hurt your future

Your heart makes you fail

You mind makes you quit

Your body makes you want to let go

Your feelings make nothing possible

Your just going to give up

Your just going to quit now when you have a chance

Your thoughts hurt your scars

Your mind makes you cut

Your heart makes you drowned

Your feelings make you die

Your voice makes you say "GOODBYE"

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  • 18 years ago

    by Wip lost the Rhythm

    I think if you took away some of the your's there would be more of an impact

    like you could do :

    Your life has to be painfully lived

    Your heart has to painfully beat

    Your mind has to be painfully processed

    Your words mean nothing
    the mind hurts your being,
    thoughts hurt your existence
    Your memories hurt your future

    and do couplets or leave it spaced out as it is. but i don't think you need that many your's or try a different word in place of it and it would still have the same message

    just a thought

  • 18 years ago

    by pain is me

    Good job
    a little different
    keep it up
    xxxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Rodney

    It was awsum

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