Loch Ness
by Sean Dohr Apr 3, 2006
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Below the murky water she lurks. As if she knows, as if she desires, the attention we are so willing to give her. But, unlike us, she realizes that the pleasure is in the chase. She stays deep beneath the surface, under the radar, breaching the water with her long rigid neck, for only few of us to see. Like a tease, she allows only subtle glimpses of her prehistoric beauty. But, one day, you can be sure, the chase will end. When all have given up hope, she will reveal herself. Her beauty everlasting... |
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18 years ago
Nice piece.
I like the descriptiveness of this poem.
5/5
~Wings -
18 years ago
by Adriana
Man keep it up!!
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18 years ago
by Sole
Sorry,
Attention we are so willing to give her.
But, unlinke us, she realises . . .
Peace. [Sole] -
18 years ago
by Sole
Great write, I can only suggest structuring it as more of a poem. The flow doesn't go perfectly in it's current format.
Below the murky water she lurks.
As if she knows,
As if she desires,
Attention we are so willing to give her. But, unlike us, she realizes that the pleasure is in the chase.
She stays deep beneath the surface,
Under the radar,
Breaching the water
With her long rigid neck,
Perhaps this helps?
Other than that, the actual description is amazing, and such a powerful topic, the poem presents mystery, and the question of truth. Excellently written.
Peace. [Sole] -
18 years ago
Awesome Poem. I loved it. I love all your work. you are a great writer. Keep up the amazing work.
