A Vacation in Paradise

by Darien   Apr 4, 2006


A Vacation in Paradise

by Darien and Kristy

Waking up on an island paradise
Hiking for a couple of hours
Passing through tropical rainforests
With animals, trees and flowers

Morning sunbeams smile on the town
As the cool breezes pass people by
A beautiful and relaxing place
of warm weather and a clear blue sky

So many things to do, such little time
The sun will be setting very soon
But the stars will be shining so bright
And tonight there is a full moon

An island paradise must have a beach
where the waters are warm and clear
Outside of the hotel room it hid
All this time it was right there

The sun sinks toward the horizon
Painting vivid colors in the sky
Pretty pinks, and reds, and oranges
A five-course meal for the eye

Palm trees sway in the evening breeze
Casting playful shadows on the sand
An endless game of cat-and-mouse
That no human can understand

Surrounded by water for miles around
Watching turquoise ripples out at sea
Hear the relaxing rush of the ocean
As gentle waves arrive and flee

A strip of pure white sand
Stretches out along the beach
Now lit only by the moonlight
One more day is out of reach

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  • 18 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Very wonderful poem Darien

  • 18 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    "But the stars will be shining so bright
    And tonight there is a full moon"
    future tense then present tense, you should standardize it, most likely to:
    "and tonight there will be a full moon"
    ~~~
    "Palm trees sway in the evening breeze
    Casting playful shadows on the sand
    An endless game of cat-and-mouse
    That no human can understand "
    my favorite stanza, particularly for the game of cat-and-mouse line.
    ~~~
    This was a great collaboration, I couldn't tell who did what, it flowed together so well. The imagery was great, as were the details present.

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    Awww! This was beautiful lol. It had really good imagry and I liked how there was alot of stuff in there about the beach. It flowed good and the rhyming was good too. Can't you just write one bad poem for me? So then I can say something bad for once? Lol.. It was really good =D 5/5

    `Taleeee xx

    P.S. Post that new poem alreadyyyy =P lol

  • 18 years ago

    by Chelsey

    GREAT JOB BOTH OF YOU!!!!!! OMG I normally don't read nature poems but totally loved this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    Kristy- my sister, your writing is so awesome loved how you worked your imagination in this
    Darien- my sexy Boo your so amazing as well!! i couldn't even tell what Kristy wrote and what you wrote!
    Excellent you two, keep writing together you do an awesome job!
    5/5
    Chelsey-Lynn

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