Aww that was great! u were such a great p0et at such an early age!! keep up the go0d w0rk
take a lo0k at my p0ems if u like
l0ve maddy x0ox

Ohmylord! you were only 11 when you wrote this? this is fantastic! I couldn't have guessed someone, whom age was 11 would write this. I lvoe it doll.

Wow you wrote this at 11!! That's pretty wicked!! You have such a deep soul haha.. I didn't really get the last line; it kind of seemed out of place, yet fit perfectly at the same time. But none-the-less it's a great write and I really enjoyed it! Espcially the quickness of the short stanzas. Nice job.

I can't critise any of your poems!! soz! it is just that they are all really good! (can you not spell some-thing wrong so i can point that out)! You have a wonderfully multi=coloured flare for poetry!

Very impressive for an eleven year old...wow! So violent and blunt too! lol Well this is quite the great poem...hello imagery!!! Great piece! 5/5