Comments : Someday I Will End It.

  • 18 years ago

    by †JustAri†

    "Relive, the sense of justice flows deep inside my mind.
    I know karma's out to get me, but it's so hard being kind.
    My brain is gooey and my eyes can't see straight;
    you'd wonder why people love to feel this way..."

    It almost sounds like a song...devastatingly lovely.

    "I've got prayers inside my head that get no answers...
    or maybe I just don't want them today."

    This line is interesting to me, but i can't point out why. :|

    Take care of yourself. You better or i'll get the fat sh!t cat Spencer to sit on your face...

    //Ari\\

  • 18 years ago

    by Chelsey

    This is so sad!! Can I be your soul sister? I suck at singing girl but I swear I'll try my best to sing to you and cheer you up!! How about..."You... are... so beautiful to meeeeee" hehe smile!
    SO the poem itself, brilliant! Love how you write, its so deep and even though I hate hearing about these feelings you feel I love the style you choose to write with! It inspires me! I hope things get better for you! Best of luck!
    Chelsey-Lynn

  • 18 years ago

    by Not Bulletproof

    Hello dear.
    This poem was spine-tingling. I dare say I cannot speak from experience, but I can sympathsize (sp?). I do hope the bad habits don't get the best of you. I know you to be smarter than that.
    As for your poem, the lines are brilliant. Your choice of words have always put me in awe. You have skill. I hope you intend to continue writing. You're very good at it.
    Please take care, dear. Here if you need an ear.

    - -SJGxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Cuddles

    Brilliant! The words seem to flow deeper than any ocean. The tone is so sad, though. I do hope everything's okay. Wonderful write!

    (Chelsey-Lynn and I will both be your soul sisters.)

    take care,
    Mary

  • 18 years ago

    by Simon Hayes

    So sad and heart breaking... Great writing, the flow was magical. Very enjoyable piece.

  • 18 years ago

    by Laura

    Strong words used to create many emotions while reading through the poem. It was very well written, and flowed flawlessly.
    Everybody has bad habits that they try to hide or cannot fess up to....at least you are aware of your bad habit and can be honest about it. That right there is progress in itself...