Add some music to it and I think you've got yourself a song.... the rhyme and flow are perfect. Wonderful write.

Angela's right. It could be a song. Nice work, JL. It has a cute upbeat rhythm. One almost feels like bouncing with the words. I love it!

Yep I'll just confirm that as well... This could be a great song, just need a good rhythm for it :)

The flow is wonerful, the words are touching. Great write :)