I didnt understand,

"...my regret you feed."

But otherwise I liked the emotion behind it. Good work

The flow seemed a little off i places, but the rhyme was good.

I love the last stanza! I read it a few times to get the meaning I think it's quite deep. Great poem I would have loved it more if it were longer though!
- Polly

Aww David i love this poem,

i really understood where you came from

*giggle* you already knew that though now didn't you?

luv ya bunches

Dara

David, you're too amazing for your own good. I mean, you have 90 some poems and none of them are bad... Is that possible? This is an amazing one too. Loved it a whole bunch. Good job David! Yay for you!