I loved the ending of this poem, and also the rhyming pattern you used different nut efective well done xxALLyxx

I do not really think that there is much I can say about this poem,that someone else hasn't already said ....AWESOME WRITE!!
Tisha~

Wow.. this one has a good flow i loved reading this poem
5/5 for sure
gr8 work
keep it up man
love
amy

The emotion...its just overwhelming. this is a great poem, even though you didnt follow a rhyme scheme, the love coming from the poem more than made up for it. keep up the excellent work

Very interesting and sweet. Great flow and message. Well done. Keep writing.
Daniel

That was so sweet and you are good i loved this poem of yours

Teehee i like it!! xoxo ttyl

It reminds me of an old song that you'd hear... i like all of your titles, by they way. they make you want to read the poem

I loved the way you used rhyme only at certain points..I guess it was to emphasise what you were trying to say? Sometimes I felt the flow was a bit disrupted but overall it was lovely!
much love x

Very good poem, I really enjoyed it, Great work, 5/5.

Seriously? Who is this guy? =^_^=

This is better than your other one. THIS deserves a 5.

[Voted 5]

_Sam

Very nice! Love It!

I loved the rhyming feature of this poem it adds that little sparkle to the poem, also i liked that u wrote from the womans perspective its something ive never tried before.

Wicked!

5/5

Gorgeous, such a gorgeous piece you have here. the word choice was great I loved how you created such a sweetly written poem through such simple poems. I liked the repeition of some of the words it was quite effective. The meaning portrayed was quite clear and showed a story within a poem a romantic time within life. Well done Joe. It has been a pleasure to read your work. ~Mel

Tis another very good poem joe, the title tis cool, the flows perfect and the first stanza rocked, been awhile since ive commented your work, i give this one a 5/5 as the others, keep them coming man!!!

And whoever said romance was dead ...

Wonderful poem Joe, word choice was just about spot on. I normally prefer soemthing that sticks to a rigid rhyme structure, but this works out just nicely as it is.

Overall very nice romantic piece.

~Pete.

Cute! *sighs* :)

Well this is definitely an "awwww" poem. O many here will fall in love with it. I thought it was nice, although the was a little awkward in placed. I'm not sure what the rhme scheme was, so that through me off a bit. I'm not not a lost poem type of person, so maybe I'm being prejudiced.

Keep writing!
Cayce

To be honest not my favorite type of poetry, it is quite cliche, in my opinion of course.
I think that you could put a little more details into emotions and make them stronger. In second, fourth and fifth stanzas there isn't rhyming so that quite threw me off cause rest of this piece rhymes, also I personally think that rhyming is somehow typical and I could predict each rhyme so I didn't find much creativity there.
Also you used some words more times which always leaves negative impression on me.
But this is just my personal opinion, it was anyway pleasure to read this.