Silence Surrounds.

I can really relate to this piece as I've always been the loner type.But there is a difference between being alone and being lonely, though sometimes the two overlap.But solitude, especially for a writer is a necessary thing, perspective is the key.You have really captured those moments of feeling so alone here though, I can really feel this one.The images and emotions you convey make this an excellent heartfelt piece.

That was so deep and dark
gud job dear!

This was really good, But maybe this line :
"A pin may drop but I
would not hear it."

Change it to:
"A pin may drop,
but I would not hear it."

Hope that helps =]

Other then that, I thought it was a really good poem, Keep it up =] 5/5

luv natalie x-x

Sorry it's been so long since you've seen a comment from me. i just so busy with school work and currently on spring break visiting florida. it's been the first time i could actually spend a little time on the site.

great poem and definately a good one for the challenge between CC and P and EOP! hopefully i can make a poem about this topic sometime soon. but i think you did an excelent job with it.

"Friends part, lovers now strangers,
only the emptiness remains"

love those lines because they really speak truth. sometimes you just don't know why you dirfted apart from those you love and cherish but sometimes you do know why. but i can really relate to those lines and practically everyone can.

~Jacklyn

Dang!!! A dark read indeed, silence
on silence the next level is so thought
provoking poem to the point of terrifying.
Its scary good work my friend excellent
job and Write On,
Bogie