Ooooh, i love the repition!

Here was my favorite stanza:

"Clouds grow darker trading the sun
shading the land, unfolding hope
Prays grow louder, chantings stronger
children dancing and smiles approaching"

"Trading the sun". I never would've thought of decribing sundown like that. I can see children playing and being happy...and it makes me smile. Reminds me of being young again. :)

Wonderful piece, lil slam!

Love Always,

//Ari\\

Well done! Beautiful flow and flawless imagery. I could see it all perfectly.
I like how you ended it with the beginning stanza, it really drives your message home.
Take care and keep it up~Holly