by erotema Apr 6, 2006
category :
Life, society /
other
Look westward, toward the setting sun. See now that all we have strove for is not fallacy and there is truly a Light to follow. We have made it thus far, and now answers become questions. |
by Ixora
Amazing poem from storyline to structure. I truly enjoy reading it and believe the work is as relateable as it is revolutionary. I hope you keep to writing as I would like to become a regular reader. |
Wow..i mean...WOW!...i'm...speechless. i loved it so much. great imagery and depth. great use of vocab too. your poem really made me think...i love poems that do that. 5/5. terrific. |
by J Lau
Powerful indeed. Such complexity in a piece deserves true recognition. I think your writing will inspire a lot of us here. You ended the poem with the perfect metaphor "If not for aspirations, the Light would ne'er again shine." Excellent write! |
by Fallen Angel
Such evocative imagery and such a stunning use of language, truely masterful. I think the deliberate obscurity of the meaning gives the reader a great opportunity to read into your poem as far as they want, whether all they want is to skim the surface or dive into what is quite obviously an incredibly deep and well thought out poem. 5/5, no question x |
by Laura
Very good write. I think for me at the beginning when I started to read I was unsure of what to expect almost as if it looked overwhelming. The style you chose to write this was different and unique, paragraph form. I myself find it very hard to write in that style. |