I really liked this poem alot! great job!

I stopped reading the repetitive part after a while but I'll tell you the reason in a bit.

The organization was realy good. I mean, the concept was different because it told a couple of different stories instead of just one but still tied together. Great organization. I love it.

I think the repetitive part was off a bit. It just didn't seem to be worded quite right to fit in with the rest of it. It was placed in all the right areas, though.
Overall 5/5

Omg i LUUUV this poem!!! it's sooooo sad!!!! you did a great good!!! keep up the good work!!! 5/5!

But shes hopeful,
[[should be "she's"]]
theres hope.
[[should be "there's"]]
But still, hes hopeful,
[[should be "he's"]]
Wheres all his money going?
[[should be "where's"]]

I liked the message in this poem, but the flow did seem a little rocky from time to time. It was good though. Keep it up!

Natalie``

{P.S. The poem "Lost In A Portrait" is that short because it was entered into a contest where you could only write 10 lines max. =)}

Great write, the flow was decent as well as the rhyme, there was only one time when I thought that your rhyme was a bit forced, but it's not like the whole poem was forced, haha. soo good job. :] I thought this poem was kind of unique in a way, because I'm guessing this is talking from times that you've seen these things occur in life. I loved the last stanza.. the person you talk about is related to you.. while the others are not.. I just liked that for some reason. Great job. 5/5.