Really well written good flow and content. could maybe be split into stanzas though i don't think that would change the overall peice or add to it in anyway so could equally be left in asolid block as it is already. great peice overall

5/5

Excellent

Wow.. i really liked the last line.. the poem itsself was good as well.. the flow was wonderful and the rhyme was good but not too overpowering.. meaning you didnt lose the meaning of the words behind the rhymes which happens alot.. the only thing i saw was the flow in the end changes from short choppy lines to longer ones so the transistion didnt flow was nicely as the rest of the poem

This one had a lot of conflict and emotion i liked it a lot ur a good writer keep it up 5/5

I really liked this poem looking forward to reading more, i love how you hold the peoples attention with all the emotion and wanting to know what happens next

The last para needs to change, like to should be too. but this poem was still very meaningful.

5/5 David

Another excellent piece, the rhyme and flow once again are excellent and the word choice also. The imagery was strong throughtout the poem and the meaning is powerful. Excellent write 5/5 GG23

Very beautiful and catching lines, the simple style is great and you have nicely written it. Well expressed mournful feelings plus a good flow.

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Beautiful lines :)

Wow so deep, and soo beautifull... amazing words, and good use of poetic devices!!
like tiny cancers???.. amazings comparsons!!
well written.. good job :)

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Oh i just love everything you write. everything you write is soo beautiful

This was a great poem
it was deep
and it was so beautiful, and yoru
word choice was great
and nice descriptions

it was short
but it
was really good

a well deserved

5/5

It was very good :)
Keep it up!