It was rough around the edges but had a great plot and a good point that u got across...work more w/ your wording and vocab, other than that grrt job! ur a good writer w/ alot of potential...
love ya lots,
sore

Hey hun!! another great poem. im running out of things to say when i comment now ive done it so much!!! hee hee hee
well take care love jess xxxxxxxxxxxx