Wondering

by Sorefromreality   Apr 8, 2006


I wonder if i slit my wrist
if my thoughts of you will cease
i wonder if when the blood trickles down
if i will finally sleep in peace

I'm pondering whether your words
will stop jabbering in my head
if i simply take my life
will my love for you also be dead

I'm skeptical about swallowing these tempting little tablets
they are, after all, suppose to cure my problems

i wonder if i quickly pass
if your presence will remain
i think if i do this correctly
i could have a lot to gain

I'm pondering if the solution to getting over you is death
maybe you wont cross my mind
if i take my last breath

will it mend my tattered heart
that was long ago violently torn apart
will it stop these thoughts of you
stop your voice from getting through

i can only hope
that i can get rid of you when i take my life
and now as i write this
i spot a perfect little black knife.....

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  • 18 years ago

    by Purple

    5/5 Poem, with a 'I hope he's not..' effect. Wondering... The basic thing to thoughts. Great flow, and I love how the third stanza cuts in. The topics a bit hard for me to talk about without falling into repitatoin or get off track about the actual poem. The fourth stanza makes the reader really think, and it coming right after the third creates some thing good, it's it's own depressed/hopeful/deadly way.

    Love always ~Purple~

  • 18 years ago

    by ~5*seconds*ago~

    Hey i loved your poem! it was great everything flowed i didnt care for the topic and im not sure if anyone does but it turned out great you have a special talent keep it up 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    I decided that i should pay more attention to your poetry. after all you read so much of mine and i don't give back much. this was a good poem and thankyou so much again for reading so much of my work and commenting and rating on it. it means a lot to me. i liked how you kept the rhythem in this poem. in a few of mine i tend to let it slip because i want my point across more than i want my poem to rhyme. but then there r those lucky poems that seem to have a bit of both....well anyways i'll give you a four on this one. i want to give you a good reason why it's not a five but i think it's just because i'm use to longer ones. it can be hard to not keep a poem simple though. i like a chalange though and try to create a long one that rhyms and sticks to the point. well anyways c ya...oh silly me...i've seem to have put a five in instead of a four...oh well i put u off to a good start even though i'm the fourth voter. ^_^ if i liked short poems i'm sure i would have wanted a five in the first place. c ya.

  • 18 years ago

    by Tripp

    Look, you cant turn to self-abusive crap for help, it never does...so i hope you havent started this stuff, and if you have, you have to stop.

    on a brighter note, great poem haha. i like the rhyme scheme, and how it rarely faltered...keep up the great work