I like this style, it's weird but in a cold way lol, and the disjointedness of the words is actually really effective cause it emphasises what you are saying. Also having the one-word-sentance thingy is good cause it breaks the poem up and again emphasises the main idea of the stanza. :)

Okay i meant 'cool' way I have no idea why I wrote that sorry lol.
Oh yeah and I also like how the poem had a happy ending and some optimism in it. :) (yay happy face again lol)

Hey this is really gd hun. and thanks 4 the comment on my first poem xxxxx