Broken Hearted

by Ike Dizzle   Apr 8, 2006


Broken Hearted

(Verse 1)
Tears rushing down your face
That no one else can feel
Fighting emotions within
Emotions that seem unreal
All alone in the shadows
And no one knows you exist
People are extremely shallow
So now you hide in a mist

(Chorus)
It is here that I cry
Wanting to feel your touch once more
The eyes that glisten in the moonlight
The face that I adore
You were the one I thought I knew
I thought it would be like it started
The one I thought I could trust
But again I lay broken hearted

(Verse 2)
You find someone you can trust
You let your guard down for a minute
There has not been any damage
So your happiness has become infinite
Then they let you down
At this point, all you dreams melt
Then the world seems to end
With all the emotions you felt

(Chorus)
It is here that I cry
Wanting to feel your touch once more
The eyes that glisten in the moonlight
The face that I adore
You were the one I thought I knew
I thought it would be like it started
The one I thought I could trust
But again I lay broken hearted

(Verse 3)
My nights full of distrust
In my veins I had much lust
I do not see why it needed to end this way
But I guess it must
I dream my last thoughts of you
My world has fallen apart
In the end I realize
That you did not have a heart

(Chorus)
It is here that I cry
Wanting to feel your touch once more
The eyes that glisten in the moonlight
The face that I adore
You were the one I thought I knew
I thought it would be like it started
The one I thought I could trust
But again I lay broken hearted

Copyright ©2006 Isaac Wilson

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  • 17 years ago

    by Iflookscouldkill

    Wow Vino....thats is really great, but I have to ask is it like a screamo song or a song where people actually understand what the hell your saying. Well keep writing

    jessie

  • 18 years ago

    by Sugar

    Wow thats interesting lol nice

  • 18 years ago

    by Moose

    I think everyone on this site should stick to poems. Songs in a way are much harder, and when they are being critiqued the lyrics need to be very fine and need to have a great or exceptional flow.

    The First thing that caught me was

    All alone in the shadows
    And no one knows you exist
    People are extremely shallow
    So now you hide in a mist

    You can see an attempt at something, but it doesnt seem like the last 4 lines made a fine point, "hide in a mist..." of what. To leave a stanza ending that way, make something before it build up to it so you know what the mist is suppose to be figurative for.

    Then the rest of the poem was fine up until (verse 3). When I read poems or songs, i like to hear a repetive rhyme scheme, you went from

    ABCBDEFE,
    ABCBDEFE,
    ABCBDEFE,
    ABCBDEFE,
    AABACDED, (This is where the flow and rhyme was kind of messed up) and
    ABCBDEFE

    Other than that, it was good. Not excellent like i've seen from other works of yours. But with a little work, this will be right up there with the best of them.

    4/5 Yours Truly
    Bryce

  • 18 years ago

    by youch

    Vino!!! it's perfect :)...........the first verse attracted me so much .......i really liked it a lot ....it matches when a person is feeling bad or sad but no one is there at all to feel with him or try to bring him up .

  • 18 years ago

    by lonelynow

    Wow i love! this is i think the best thing i have read that you have written..
    please don't look at my song attempts because they are pathetic compared to this!
    do you have a tune as well??
    thanks for the comment it wasn't a bad one at all it's very good cos the last one i got from you was:

    "good job.

    -vino"

    which is exactly tear jerking :P

    this song however..

    you're really talented!!
    well done!

    lonelynow xxx

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