Comments : A new day

  • 18 years ago

    by Vegetable

    Again really well done, and very true. The only problem I have it that this bit

    "That the anger would not show.
    By told you're useless
    Told to leave, just to go"

    doen't make much sence, I think the "by" throws me off a bit. But it could be just me.

  • 18 years ago

    by xxxStarSxxx

    Very good. the only thing that gets me mixed up a bit is this line:

    "That the anger would not show.
    By told you're useless
    Told to leave, just to go"

    The "by" kinda makes it...idunno. anyhow i think it just thorws me off but other than that....5/5 Great work!