Very good peice, very well writtne.

,may want to edit the words that have turned into "Youâ??ll" typew things though.

but great peice all in all

5./5

I really thought this one was good, actually. I did think it was well written even though there's small errors like to=too and maybe that capital YOUR should have been lower case. But I see the point you were trying to make.

This was really good, So sad though. Im sorry if this is based on true feelings. Anywho, 5/5 cause i thought it was awesome!! =]

luv natalie x-x

Well technicalities first
last stanza to=>too, maybe "because OF your drink

besides that i love the poem. its heartfelt and i like the flow. it has a good message. nice job

I really like this poem. i can relate to it.

Very good! It using great language and depth. {5/5}

[PygmyPuff]

The rhyming was great and the flow was AMAZING! The meaning is one well expressed, written really clearly. Good job. =]

Great poem very well written with a few small errors only one i can remember is the word loosing should be losing?
lol oh well amazong poem great flow great rhyming. loved it! : )

Great poem! It was really sad but it had good emotion. The rhyme and flow were excelent. You are really talented! Great job!

That is really good.. The flow and rhythm was really good and the rhyme scheme didn't seem at all forced. it's a very sad situation to be in and I'm sorry that you have to go through this. Keep it up and stay strong! :) 5/5

A little should be edited but this was a good poem.

5/5

Love,

Marcus

W00T W00T!

Your first stanza?
Very catchy.
It seems almost like a nursery rhyme =P

Dear, like I said, punctuation would turn this into art.

And dad its all because YOUR drink.
That doesn't really make sense.
Do you mean to say
It's because "you drink"
Or "You're drunk"
?
All in all.
When I read the thing about the drinking.
I thought it was kind of random at first.
You didn't really lead up much to that.

Hun, you choose the really good topics.
Where on earth do you come up with these ideas? Lol.

Wow...so sad..and full of emotion...i totaly love the impact you put into the capitalized word in the last sentence. it was great!
5/5
***aLy***