Wow. i really like this poem. It's filled with emotion. Great job! 5/5*

This is beautiful Anita. I can really feel your pain and anger. The touch of loneliness and the feeling of being betrayed. It was a good read, one thing though. This line:
The feelings i have are of lost and betrayed
How about this:
The feelings I have being, lost, betrayed,

That sounds better, don't you think? Just some constrictive critique. If you wanna keep it the same, go ahead.

A)Title. Would be good without ! points.
B)Concept: Beautiful needing but not wanting. I believe.
C)Emotional element: The feelings i have being, lost, betrayed. And anger.
D)Uppercase i's. Minus extra ! points. Maybe cut down the last line.4.7/5

Wow, a very good poem indeed. I love the way you increase emotion and feeling throughout the poem. A great account and well done.

Much love and God bless,
Fallen*-

Aaaw....very touching...and very emotional... i wanna hug somebody now

Wow a beautiful piece. the emotion is well put.
Don't give me your sorries and say that you care
Don't give me your love when its no longer there

those lines really stand out for me.

Kat

My sentiments exactly!

Wow great job^^ i also love the lines that Kat mentioned .. it reminds me alot of my parents.. i guess.. excellent job 5/5 keep it up

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

I esp love:
How could you once love, then turn to stone
And leave me feeling lost and alone

besides that i love the the couplets at teh end of the stanzas. very nice. :)

I really loved this one!! Fav lines:
"Yes, my heart loves you, and will always do
But no, i don't need you nor what you've put me through!!!"

In this poem, You put your feelings right out there. And it was very easy to understand. Great job! 5/5

luv natalie x-x

This is a really beautifull poem
I feel your anger and your pain

Good job!