Aw wow, This was really good! I rekon it would go great as a song too =] hehe But yeah, I loved how you repeated that same stanza twice, It was good! 5/5

luv natalie x-x

Luv da poem..is so sweet and nice..but sad..nd its got good flow..n yh i agree...luv da way u repeated dat stanza...dis bit:

Sorry I didn't see you fading
Sorry I didn't know what to do.

its wiked linez..i luv em..n fanx for da comnt!!
xxx
mwah
mezangel

This affects me, as my sister has a mental condition and Im not sure what to do most of the time, she's tried to walk in front of a train. And I love her with all my heart.
That's probably why this poem drags me in deep. I love poems that do that
~Em
5/5

Great poem...It had a great affect on me because I have very close friends who were sisters and went through immense pain in their lives. I feel the same way, because I was extremely blind to their pains at the time, and now I wish with all my heart I was there to help them. The poem easily touched me. Keep it up and thanks for the comments!