Hey gr8 writer
I luved this poems
lots of emotions and amazingly written
luv all ur poems huni
Luv Yaaaa
NemO x0x0x0x0x0x

Wowwww hny u no hw 2ryt innit
u put so much emotion into it
wow n its so nicely put aswel bt
it bta not b yr experience wid it
lve u hun
x

Brillaintly wriiten. very strong feelings and very clearly expresed

5/5

Strong words and the flow was off in certain places but not too bad. Rather interesting.
~S3I -Faith

WOW.. this is probably the best poem ive read in a very long time.. i was gonna pick out my favorite line but i cant because the whole piece was amazing!! 5/5

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

I think you should break it up everynow in then to improve the flow. Great imagery but it gets lost as the sentences are too close together. Interesting no doubt and as I said brilliant imagery. YOu just need to make it stand out more.

Hey this is seriously a very well written poem, just loved reading it, m so in love with sad poems.. :o)

all the best and take care
5/5

A sad poem just the way I like them =0) I can relate so much and I am going through the same things with cutting and depression ect. Just amazingly written, so deep and full of emotions =0)

Much Love Sabrina

Amazing flow and structure.
exception use of raw emotions.
deeply heart felt poem

WELL DONE!!!

**smile**

BRILLIANT and amazing wirting!
Very good!
catchy emotional, very sad...

Keep up the good work o.o

"Visions in the darkness
A darkened dream
Of outlines so lifeless
A long silent scream.?
that's my favourite stanza...love this poem.

It was good. it had a good flow to it. you know like it came straight from your heart. And you have amazing work when it is from the heart. I loved it. But the only part that bothered me about it ( and this is just little non-important stuff) the stanzas were all the same amount of lines except two of them.

Enthralled by the sight
Of yourself, robbed of life
Vision giving no fright,
Of the hand with the knife.

*This was my favorite stanza. The diction you use here is amazing. I thought you did a wonderful job with this. It so full of deep emotions and pain. I LOVE the imagery you use here. It has both a sad and dark feel to it. Very sad poem, but I can relate. Keep it up hun. This was brillant ^.^ Nik*