by Natalie
This was good. I also have a poem called "Suicide Note" Check it out if you want. The only tip i think i can give on this one, Is too maby explain a bit more as to why you want to commit suicide, It might help the reader understand a bit more. Other then that, I liked it! Keep it up 5/5 |
Very good peice, i agree with the last comment about maybe having a little more detail but other than that it is a very clearly written peice. |
I didnt understand the last asterixed comment but I liked the format you used for this...it was very melancholy and sinister but the rhyme and pace was exhilerating...nice stuff... |
by PS
Interesting. i dont really like suicide things. i like this: |
by Fallen~Tears
Wow.. this was great.. I loved it.. i thought it showed great emotion.. great job 5/5 |
I like this one, but since it's a suicide note...I think you should say more, because these are your "last words". |
by zoe
Theres alot of feeling here, but have to agree with the comments before, maybe a little more explination on the 'why' |
by hezha murad
WOW, GREAT POEM...YOUR EMOTIONS REALLY SHOWED..GOOD JOB GIRL.. |
by Darien
That was a weird style indeed, but it worked so well with the poem. Really emotional stuff. I think you should change the title to Pain of You. |