I think this poem is really good...even though you can tell you're a "beginner", it's still very descriptive and heart-felt.

I recommend that you try to add rhyme schemes to your poems..it helps them flow a lot better. I think you have talent and you can grow to be an inspiring writer. You've got to start somewhere and you're on the right track! Good job! 5/5

*My only suggestion is to add an extra line to the last stanza.*

...try something like

"so until the end just know
that my love for you is strong
and each night when you leave me
I'll be waiting for you til dawn."

or somethin like that..I dunno, jus tryin to help ya out a little!

But keep doin what you're doin and work at bein one of the best!

~Much love~
-Kelly-

Thats a good heartfelt poem keep up the good work