Hey....i reali like this poem of urs!!!....ur heaps good lol....do u hve msn....if ya wana chat mine is
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I like the ending of this poem. it all the poems i've writen i'll share with you a little secret. nothing matters most but the ending. you could have a weak beginning, but if your ending is amazing people will want to read your poem again. please check out my new poem titled "Rebuild her World' its dedicated to you. also, watch for rythem in your poetry, and try this site out for help www.rymezone.com.

I like how you compared it all ..and then you knew at the end it was about you ..i like poems like this [: good job

Hey hey.. i been readin ya poems and they are awesum.. keep up the good work.. lyk someone else sed i rekon ya needa work on ya rhythm and ... wel apart from that i like them they have good meaning.. well thanx a bunch for u comment..!! =].. catchya..