If Only

by X2892   Apr 13, 2006


Day by day, night by night
you are the girl of my dreams.
The girl who seems
to be in my mind
endlessly, I try to find
a way to letting you
have a clue
of how much you mean to me.

But when I try to do that
I feel like a baseball
getting hit by a bat,
that would just fall
to the foul side.

But... am I just a friend?
That would only end
up being just a friend?
Because I want to end
up being more than a friend.

Copyright © Paul Salazar

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  • 18 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Again i think the flow was jumpy, but i liked the idea behind the poem, and i thought it was well expressed.

  • 18 years ago

    by Dumpstead

    You must improve your flow of the poem and vocabulary. Do not repeat the same words many times and neither shoudl you repeat the same concept again and again; if you want to express something depply or strongly you must find appropriate words.

  • 18 years ago

    by kelly

    Its ok not to bad

  • 18 years ago

    by Fruitloop XxProblem ChildxX

    Truely fantastic....purely perfact
    ~sarah~

  • 18 years ago

    by Roxy

    Awww thats amzing your poems are great
    xoxroxyxox
    nice work keep wrtiing!!

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