Your rhyming scheme is kinda out of whack but its a deep poem full of emotion and desperation and I can sense that regardless of your format. Plenty of people on the site happy to help you edit this kind of thing to make your poetry more effective, myself included if you want the help. Besides that its a great piece keep writing :o)

This was an ok poem...keep writing..cuz ur writing will improve over time...ne wayz..nice job...

~Bl0oDyAnGeLeYeZ~