I liked the message you were trying to portray in this poem Kaci and I commend you highly for it. I couldnt agree with you more. In terms of writing I think you could have gone deeper with this, been more expressive and emotional on the topic really let loose about the way it gets to you and the way it should be. Also try constructing your sentences with correct english to help make your message clearer rather than using slang :o) Good write though :o)

Eirisa

This is really awesome and ur right i love it