Lost

by Mitch   Apr 13, 2006


Lost from within
Pursuing the end
That which was broken
I cannot mend
Broken it bleeds
Broken it dies
Bleeding the poison
Of so many lies
An ashen complexion
I'm bleeding green
Whether I live
Remains to be seen

© Mitch 2006

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  • 18 years ago

    by PS

    Wow i really like this. with the shortness and rhyme. its perfect.

    :Bleeding the poison
    Of so many lies

    awesome line

  • 18 years ago

    by Biscuit

    You have a great talent here but i think u should experiment a bit more, try to write something a bit different by changing your usual structure and rhyming pattern adn , as i said before, maybe a happier subject (although you seem well inspired by this subject so perhaps you could just write another poem with a different rhtym or something). id love to read the result as u are definately a good writer!
    all the best xx

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Very good peice, short but powerful.

  • 18 years ago

    by Fallen~Tears

    GREAT job .. short but great.. nice job 5/5

    ~!*FallenTears~!*
    ~!*Meaghen~!*

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    Wow, That was really cool! 5/5 =]

    luv natalie x-x

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