by xXxUNOxXx Apr 13, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
Somewhere in the night a child cries, |
I appreciate this poem more because it isn't about love. Also, the contrast in each stanza that you create between the first two lines and the third line is makes the poem strong. I'm not a big fan of the last line, but that's ok cause it is yor poem. I just think it is both cliche and unneccesary. The reader already understands that is whre your thoughts have gone to. |
by kumi
That was pretty good i liked it a lot type me at killerkumi@yahoo.com |
by Cyma Khan
The way u expressed ur feelings in a gr8 way dear...like ths flow |
by Shane Peate
I love the feelings of sadness throughout, they are very impacting. Also the poem flows very well. Nice work. |
by kujo666
This is very good |