Jeannie, this is outstanding. putting it together gives it a story like intensity that readers might have missed reading the fragments apart.

great writing!

love and peace
shobhana

Wow. Great poem. It did not seem as long as it really is- thats good. That means the reader gets lost in the poem and isn't thinking about when it will be over. The flow was good and the word choice was outstanding. Keep it up!

xxEvilAngelxx

This poem is very good shakespear would be proud. great work