Pretty good, i would add some depth, some description to make it even better... otherwise you did pretty well!
keep up the good work
amanda and baby

Another great poem but your poems are a bit 'samey', try experimenting with your talent by applying it to different types of poems ie, a different structure or rhyming pattern and a different topic, im sure the result would be amazing! good luck xx

Can't put in to words how much I loved it. Good job David! Hooray for you! hehe

Love Always
~Casey J