by ♥broken fairytales♥ Apr 14, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Every tear that fall from my eyes |
by Polly
Good work, though I felt it could do with some tweaks here and there - if you added and took a way a couple of syllables the flow would improve a lot! I like the repetition in it, the first word of every stanza being the same, but I thought perhaps that restricted each line a bit? Other than that I think it's a great poem, and with a bit of work it could be amazing!! |