I'm not really a fan of repatitive peices like this, though i can see why you used the repition and its potential effect it is not really my thing. other than that though the peice has a lot of good points, the flow is good and tit holds together well thoughout, the rhymes seem unforced and the content very well portrayed.

Good poem! I think the repetition in it is very effective, as the poem seems to encrypted (sp) within the words 'one year has passed'. Powerful poem, well done and take care
Polly x