I liked it. Its something i can relate to. Awsome job.:D

Great peice, well written with a good flow. i esspessially like the end, it finishes it off very well but still leaves the idea that the concepts within the poem will go on for time to come.

5/5

I really liked the title and the concept. That the ending kind of may mean that everything would repeat itself. I did think you could have added more details to it, though. BUt other than that it was good.

Quite excellent in my opinion short and sweet but it had alot of emotion and good style as well as an excellent ryhme scheme. i liked it alot :) 5/5
~jacob

I like this:
Mascara stains
Running from her eyes
A poisoned mind
From all of his lies

great poem. it truly is sad and deep. nice job

Really great - the short lines make more of an emphasis, and really bring out the meaning, and depth of the poem. Very well written.

Peace. [Sole]

Wow someone must have really hurt you...i'm sorry but this is good. 5/5

Really good job, that was a great poem... well written, nice rhymes, goood flow.. I love it. well done..

I like how you ended it..

"A lonely cry
That was heard by none
Endless pain
That had only begun..."

I think that was a good ending for this poem.

I give it a 5/5
Keep it up
Stay Strong..*

I must agree with the others- it was a wonderfully written poem. Your poetry always lingers and is always very easy to picture because the imagery is very much alive. A quality I love in your poems...5/5 from me....

[lostlaureate - come find me]

Nice writing