Comments : We Started Out With a Hello

  • 18 years ago

    by donk2ymouth

    Long poem with no spaces, I liked it though..Was a tad bit hard on the eyes..But I think that is also because of this color scheme, and I'm a bit tired.

    Nice job, the ending was a bit weak, but the message was strong, so it didn't matter much. The imagery was a little off, you were lacking some adjectives.

    Keep up the good work.