The stanza Britt pointed out is my favorite too! Aww Darien I truly hate reading sad poems from you!! You out of all people should be happy and cheerful like you seem to always be! THis write, I really liked, specifically how you wrote it!...I will cheer you up my love! And I will heal that vocal cord if ya know what I mean (wink wink) call me.hehe jk
FEEL better DARIEN! you know everyone is here to talk to at times like this..keep writing and exprressing emotion its good for you!
Mwah
Chelsey

This was a fairly god poem i liek the other two i have read more but this is still a good poem. the form and style was unique and that added alot to the poem as well as the story it portrayed. the ryhme scheme also worked well especially for the form and style you used :)
~jacob

Nice job! i love all the couplets. esp:
Cheaters never win,
they hold a deadly sin.
and
I will never forgive,
for as long as I live.
awesome job!

I liked the other two more probably because you say in this one you could never forgive and really deep down that hurts us so much more when we know there will never be a possibility for doing so. You might not forgive for years but always hold that hope that you will.
I could feel your anger through these words, though. So much in so few lines that I wonder just who exactly were you or the speaker yelling at and truley what for.

You always have really strong emotion in all of you poems. It makes them really stand out from other peoples. You had a good rhyme scheme.

W.O.W I can't even pick a favourite part, I loved it all. I can relate heaps, but in different way I think. It was really good. Nothing in there that I rekon needs to be changed. Awesome job again, 5/5 keep it uppp =P

`taleee xx

Wow, another great job again! You're an amazing writer! Keep it up! 5/5

-Stephanie-

Awww! This Was Really Good! I Could Feel Everything The Way You Exspressed It Was Really Good! Amazing Flow...Your Work Is Deff A Piece Of Art! 5/5
Love,
Steph

This is yet another favourite. I really hope you never give up writing, i'm going to add you to my favourites also. 5/5