A great little poem,

1 nitpick

I would change we're to we are.
I know most people would say"we're" however 'we are' tends to help the flow bounce nicer into line 4.

Also (did I say 1 nit pick?)
No commas or full stops apart from lines 4, 8, 11 and 12.

So I'll let destiny weave it's pattern.

I like this line the best.
Can anybody escape their destiny?
Mine was obviously to be a bit anal on a poetry website!!

regards

Darren

I found the poem romantic but I would have to agree with the above comment the flow would be better with we are instead of we're.

Patiently waiting for someone to be yours can be a painful thing. But I will disagree with the other comments in a way. I feel you wrote that in one go, straight from the heart, without thinking about punctuation etc. so it conveys the honest feelings inside you..its the meaning that counts.!! I think your poem is lovely, well done. x

Hi again. Just re-read your poem another 4 times, and to me, if it's read with a musical flow then it works really well. x