Excellent write! Very different style, but worked beautifully. Only comment I have is a couple of typos... 1st stanza with the girl... should read "how I feel" or "how I felt" and "what I felt". The sixth stanza from bottom with the guy... should read "If only she could tell..." and "...the only one I've felt..." Other then that, great job! Keep up the great work! 5/5

VERY GOOD! =) 5/5