Aw wow huni
gr8 poem
the idea is kinda strange but thats wut I liked in it
the last stanza was really nice ;)
keep it up huni
Luv Yaaaaaaaaa
NemO xxxxxxxxxx

Wow Mona. I loved this. I loved how you always came back with "Out of my hand and shatters on the floor". This was amazing, like alll of your poetry. You, my dear, are amazing! I love youuu.

infinite x's

Hello!
It seems like such a random poem...in a good way(as always) though.
I was so happy to see that you commented me...and what a comment it was!:D
I simply love the quote you wrote in it, it's so good...and it does sound just like me
I also love your work...it may sound like I'm just repeating what you said to me but I really do...I already can't wait until the next one!
I'm really glad you like mine too...what you comment means alot to me
Great work hunn keep it up!
lots of love! -xxx-

Incredible work! I really like how you repeated the lines "....,it slips
and shatters on the floor" very powerful
Good job!

Oh My God that is so totally kool. i thought it was totally amazing the way you repeated the falling to the floor and shattering thing with different Items. it's so sad at the end...
Absolutely amnazing, keep Smiling : )

Always,
~Suzie

Great peice, the rpition of falling and shattering objects thoughout really ulls the peice together well

Hey!!
Of course I still love you!!
I Figured you got confused but didn't say anything 'cause I don't really mind
Seriously don't worry about it
It's so sweet that you make paintings like that
Really
Don't worry you still have as big of a place in my heart....!;)
luv ya!-xxxx-

Wow. once again its a great poem.
do u ever write a bad one? i think not. how do u do that, how are you so talented.
ne way keep it up. i love reading your stuff and as i can see im not the only one.
i think my favorite line was the last one.
"As I try to control my life, it slips
Out of my hand and shatters on the floor"
Anyway all in all i love your poems they are all so great.

Wow, this was an amazing poem!!! I love how there's so much emotion in it. And the ending is perfect... it finishes the poem off perfectly.

- Thanks for reading my poem -

~ Tina

I really liked how it kinda showed the dependence on sumone and then how you come back from that and how its scary butkinda liberating at the same time. Really liked it xxx

Nicely done...
"Till then I won't need you hand
So put it back in your pocket"
^^^ love these lines, incredibly written.
Awesome poem! :)

I really liked the part that u repeated, it has a lot of emotion in it.a poem that stays in your mind.fantastic.

Gr8 poem,
i totally get it....and symperthise....x

I can totally relate to this poem and I just wanted to say that you are an awesome poet so keep doing what you rae doing so people like us know that we aren't the only ones.

Nice rhythm and great feeling. 5/5

It wus great! i rele like how u repeated that one line. keep up the good work

Fantastic mona, i get up real early in the mornin, if u have msn, plz add me, we can early mornin rambles 2gether lol, mikey xxx
mr.lubba_lubba_man@hotmail.co.uk

Hey that was really good so powerful and awesme.... how u kept repeatn those lines..... So sad @ da end but loved it.... without a doubt. Keep writing, hold ur head uo high and keep smiling
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Hannah
check out mi poems puh-lese....

That's really good yo, I really like your use of repetiveness, keep up the good work. laterz.

Hey great poem thats a great poem well i hope that ramble you had isn't a memory