I enjoyed it.

Heya baby

Wow hun!! I love 4am rambles! altho i usually have mine at around 2-2:30, we'll blame long distance weird time change thing.
(wow that made NO sense)
ANyway:
"I try to come to grips
But I can't even breathe no more
As I try to control my life, it slips
Out of my hand and shatters on the floor"

Absolutely genius.. well done for repeating it, that worked wonderfully and i liked how u altered it at the end. Give the poem a sense of a finished story.

Im really annoyed that i never get to talk to u on msn:(

love ya xooxox

I wish you would have called me instead. Great emotion conveyed there, very real. I've been in that poem before. You are real and expressive....love your words. Thank you....you are a gifted poet, We need you in our world!