Good rhyming but maybe a bit too muxh repeptition... xx

I can really relate to this poem. Very well done. 5/5

I love this poem! It's very good. You have talent.

The ryhme is very good unforced and runs well, the 1st two lines are brillint at hooking the reader in and this interest is maintained thouhgout. overall a great peice

5/5

"okey" should probably be "okay"...anyway that' the boring part of the comment over with
I loved this poem because of its simplicity, and the repetition of the line is something I like doing myself
The last line was perfect to and very thought out ... changing the rhyme scemem at the end also helped emphasise and make the last two lines stand out
A great read :)

Nice job, not my usual style, but nicely written

I love it 4/5...keep up the great work!

I love the last two lines. You spelled 'okay' wrong in the second line though. Good write. 4/5