Architects And Hearts

by Richard   Apr 17, 2006


I trusted an architect
I trusted her well
i gave her my hearts design
my lifes plan.

make me pretty
leave out all doubt
give me eyes blue as the sky
i don't expect perfection.

she assured of a build
she swore it would be swell
there would be no problems
there would be no breaks

she was the best i hired
she was top out of them all
someone who knew me best
my architect

i knew it was hard for her to work
her mood wasn't so happy
during her training years
the teachers weren't to kind

she'd been hit
she'd been hurt
she sought peace in building
she thought rest in a job well done.

everyday in and out
her heart would skip beats
not the good ones
they caused blood leaks

her head hurt in ways
ways that no one else has felt
her breathing hard
a chest not made to last

her feet and legs
so weak and tired
toe nails unclipped
almost failing to resist collapsing

on the first of july
its the end of a tiring night
she's killed by car
she's the driver inside.

on that unexpected night
the architect died
she did not accomplish
what she started

never will i take chances again
never will someone replace her
she was all that i had
she was my saviour

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  • 18 years ago

    by Synh

    Very well written and sad. A little more detail wouldn't have hurt but it was still good.

  • 18 years ago

    by lost_laureate

    I agree with aze. The title worked well and the idea of the architect and your heart was a very unique angle to take on this poem. The ending felt forced but a pretty awesome poem here.

  • 18 years ago

    by Synh

    Very well written but I definetely think you could've gone further into depth with it. 4/5

  • 18 years ago

    by azlan26

    Just some quick typos:
    "preety" should be pretty, "werent to" should be weren't too, "shes" should be she's and "shed" should be she'd
    OK now that's all the boring rubbish over
    The poem itself was faboulous
    Really I have never seen this idea used before amd it certainly worked to your advantage...original poems are always the best
    So many twists and turns...I loved it
    Keep writing :)

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    This is written very well, the story is clearly told and the progression of the peice well composed.

    5/5